Invisible evil covering the land
All will happily worship his bloody hand
Malevolent hidden lord of damnation
Spreading iniquity throughout the nation Unacceptable magic
So unthinkably tragic
His young nemesis slumbers in ignorance
Magic so thick but a mere pawn
Forsaken yet the only one with a chance
Wielding legendary weapon
All the nobles are only ruling us because of their powers, so why would that Dark Lord be any different? Just give him a fancy title, put him in control of a region and be done with it! It's not like anyone noticed he was influencing politics anyway, so he won't be that different from all the other assholes in the North!— A southern man refusing to help the king
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Love this article and how it's written! Your take on prophecy is very interesting!
Thanks :D That's my go to mechanism to explain divination magic. I don't like when things are set in stone and can actually be predicted XD
After I actually read what I was reading and understood this is written in a diary format the use of all the emoji's makes a lot more sense and is actually adding a of depth lot to the story. The technique part in the beginning is a bit difficult to follow, but once you start talking about Elénie it becomes clear.
To finish the article with "And we all know who survived in the end. " is gold.
Thanks :D I used the emoji just like I did when I was writing a bullet journal XD By the technical part I'm guessing you mean especially the "prophecy magic" bit? Yes, that would probably work better with an example in a quote. Unfortunately, I'm out of words... Isabelle is really vindicative, isn't she? :p
Great article and as always fun to read! ^^ Nice to learn something more about how the Dark Lord thing started to become known. Pretty cool way doing prophesies. Needs more emoticons though ;)
Thanks! Yes, the poor Dark Lord, his plans was going on perfectly and he was well on his way to victory when this happened :( I've added some more emojis since then :p Hope you're satisfied! XD
Oh you actually did that ? xp What have I done! Poor dark lord though.
I love your "unreliable narrator" second-person approach to this character! Well done!
Thanks :D Writing in character is sometimes annoying with how limited I am in the kind of things I can share in the article, but it's also really fun to be able to react to what I'm saying :D
I love the illustrations and icons - they make this very fun to read. I also really appreciate how information and pronunciations are included when you move your mouse over a name or word.
Thanks! It's been lots of fun adding all those emojis and drawings :D It was similar to how I was making my bullet journal when I had one, and poor Isabelle has way to much time on her hands to do all of that...
Amélie, as always this article was a pleasure to read. You are an awesome writer. Having it from the viewpoint of someone else writing in a journal was interesting and fun. Also, the way prophecy magic works is very cool. Not so much an accurate description of the future as an interpretation of the now. Your choice of illustrations, art and formatting are always examples of what I hope to one day achieve. Keep being an awesome part of the community.
Thanks a lot for you comment! Writing in character is really fun, I love being able to write any stupid reaction or comment that comes to mind about the rest of the text, and being able to play with silly emojis XD And it also give me an excuse for my bad drawing skills, as it's all because of Isabelle XD
I like how the prophecy magic works! And also how Elènie was both admired for her talent but also "hated" because if it wasn't for her people wouldn't die (well, more like, people wouldn't notice that people was dying because of that). Great job!
Thanks :D The bringer of bad news are always hated, aren't they? :( Not that Elènie left that stopped her! She really knew how to turn any situation to her advantage, a shame she miscalculated with the dark lord and thought she was in a position to negotiate for more...
I have to say, I really love the first person journal style on display here -- it's just so easy to read and get immersed in, it has such wonderful flow. The emojis are a really great touch too xD "They start by meditating for a few minutes to an hour—don't know why, to get in the right mood, I guess?" amazing xD The way you took us through an introduction to the prophetesses, the way the magic works, the music, and the impact at the start was a really great introduction. Makes the following portions regarding the bard themselves really easy to understand and get into! It's fascinating to have a bard who's... "barding" is so tied to magic and prophecy. I love how skilled Elenie is and the risks she takes to prove it. Even if that high skill and confidence ends up coming back to bite her (rip) D: She's a great character, and this is a great article :D The dialogue, art, emojis, everything really brings it together nicely.
Thanks for the comment :D I wasn't intended at all to go that way with the prophecy magic before the challenge, but this was really an amazing inspiration! I'm also glad you like the style, I really had fun with those drawings and emojis XD
Hi! As usual for your articles, this was a great entry. I liked this use of emojis, it really made the text more dynamic and aerated. Similarly, I liked the great number of personal and credited artworks you added to the description, it made things all the easier to read. The tooltips with indications on how to pronounce nouns also was a great addition. As for the content, that is a fairly standard dark lord prophecy, but a well-written one nonetheless. Still, whether that said dark lord is actually evil is unclear! And it has a fairly distinct approach to things, being hidden in illusions and acting through political mishaps and general paranoïa. Besides, I liked this unreliable narrator approach: they always are the best, and in this situation it even reinforced the questions one can have regarding that dark lord! Finally, this way you describe prophecies, and how it is used to try and pierce through the Dark Lord's illusions was really nice. Almost like intelligence warfare, at this level. Anyway, great job!
Thanks for the comment :D Indeed, Isabelle is a very unreliable narrator. She was in Sérannie for seven years during the Quest to defeat the Dark Lord, but she was surrounded by the king's children, royal mages and royal guards, really not the best entourage to get an objective view on what's going on! And yes, those prophecies are an extremely useful tool to point towards enemies but also all the nobles in the kingdom and members of the court. Personal shields against them are hard to raise, and so everyone risks having their personal lives exposed at any moment :(
Since her tragic death, Elènie's biggest legacy has been the Dark Lord's defeat and the preservation of Sérannian freedom. Of course the Dark Lord feared her. Coward. The Dark Lord is a coward. No honor in his dark soul... Thanks for the read, it was a joy and I wept a little for Elènie.
Awww, that poor Dark Lord :p I'm glad I made you cry XD Though I'm also sad that I decided to kill Elènie and can't do more awesome stuff with her, she is a very fun character...
Haha! XD I love this article, from the structure to the character herself. The introduction to who prophets are and what role they play in Sérannie read smoothly, and I was able to prepare and adorn the room for the guest to come — Elènie. It's kind of fun and amusing to read about the character from a perspective of an outsider — not only an excited and smug teenager but also an otherworlder. The emojis help with that a lot — I could get in the mood even before I read about Elènie herself. My first thought was that there were just too many of them, but while reading, I found that they served as a nice wrap up of the thought described. The small fragments of poetry have a catchy rhythm to them. I wonder what melody you would pick? I found the little bits of social realism amusing — people blaming her for sounding the alarm when everything could've stayed perfectly normal, as it always was. It probably wouldn't, but not that anyone would care. They would then blame her anyway for another reason, probably... There are some differences in character names, particularly in the pronunciation of Elènie's family name and the Questing party (drawing vs the text). Story-wise, I miss Elènie's point of view and feel she could be an intriguing and captivating character. Is it something you are leaving for the book or the short story? Fingers crossed for making it in time. I enjoyed reading Isabelle's journal.
Thanks a lot for the comment :D I didn't have a specific melody for the poetry/song, though I always end up more chanting them than properly singing (which is supposed to be what Elènie is doing). Yes, it's always the people sharing the bad news that are blamed :( But don't worry, Elènie was not the type to let any of that bother her :p thanks for catching the typos with the name!!! I didn't realise at all that problem with the drawing - first time I mess Calendre's name too, as this one has been the same from the start! The Damance vs Danance one is because I decided on n first, then made the mistake with m through the article and then had no choice but to do the switch XD Seems that one last n had slipped in in the variable... And I ended up making that short story indeed! I love writing quotes from the character POV and I was very sad I couldn't do that here because it's all from Isabelle's POV, but I couldn't just pass that occasion! I choice to write about her last day at court and her meeting with the dark lord. It's so sad that it could all have gone differently if only Isabelle was not the main character instead :p
Very nice! I love the approach to prophesy and the world jumping mechanic. These being Isabelle's notes is a good literary angle. I also really like the presentation, especially the Chibis pictures, they are adorable. I see what you meant about the word limit issue that I'd described on mine, but you've managed to get a lot of information in to the article which is awesome. Thank you for you great work!
Thanks for the comment :D I'm glad that you like the style of the article. It's really fun to explore different ways to do articles in different worlds or articles and I like what I'm doing here with the journal style. It's also an excuse for my bad drawings XD
I liked the narrator comments and faces. I didn't expect she would be part of the story in a questing party! Whoo! Glad you survived :)
Thanks for the comment :D Yes, Isabelle is the main character for the novel set in this world. The questing party is the background that occurred before the novel start.
As others have said, the narrator, her unique emoji style and the hand drawings are the silent stars in the background - though there is also so much interesting stuff to talk about. I love how the journal style achieves such a narrative unity with those elements. Musical prophecies seem so natural if you think about it, but I've not seen it done before, so that's a great premise. Elènie's talents in cold reading, prophecy and intrigue and her driven nature explain her success very well - though I wonder what would have been the limit on her ambition, if she wouldn't have been killed. She seems so well suited to the game of the courts that I wouldn't be surprised if she wasn't up to cloak and dagger shenanigans. I'm left to wonder in what way Elènie or her prophecy will show up again. She has to. Right? Right? Anyways, this was amazing to read. I was ready to subscribe at paragraph two.
Thank you for you comment :D I've ended up writing a short story about Elènie because I couldn't stand not showing more about her. Such a shame I decided to kill her, she could have been the main character of a noel instead... :( I show a bit more of Elènie's ambitions in the short story, but yes, there was no way of not getting involved in all of the schemes while living in the court. Prophets still have control of what they say during their songs, and so this is riff for manipulations about what and what not to reveal about certain persons :p However, Elènie is not from the nobility and the Sérannian society is very divided between noble and commoners, so it was likely that she would have found her way blocked before long. The Dark Lord himself was a good alternative, if only she had negotiated better with him...
Your article is so epic and detailed, I love the play of present prophecy and destiny being wo en together with music and history. Just amazing.
Thanks :D I wasn't intending to use music for the prophecy before this challenge, but it really ended up inspiring me and I love the idea now :D
I found the emojis distracting, and though it made it hard to enjoy the text in between them. I see that others have liked it though, so this is just another opinion heh
No problem, I understand that it's not a style working for everyone. Thanks for stopping by to comment anyway!
Nice and well worked out article. Interesting way to have the future influencing the now without making the end result a fact. The hand drawn art makes it much more personal :-) Did she perhaps / maybe somehow predict her own demise ? the assassination? (without recognising her own person as victim?)
Thanks for the comment! :D She predicted her own death, both because she was a bit too arrogant to consider that possibility, but mostly because the Dark Lord's protections against prophecy magic makes it extremely difficult to predict anything linked to him in any way.
This was really cool I like the Roman / maybe Grecian? influences mixed with fantasy! I love how feisty and kind of cut throat she is. Sad she passed away but she kind of achieved what she always wanted, leaving behind such a grand legacy like that! Also who is this Dark lord? lol
Thanks :D Yes the world is strongly inspired by Roman culture, although I've also realised I added a few things from the revolutionary period of France when I wasn't paying attention XD Yes, poor Elènie... I ended up liking her a lot more than I expected and now I'm sad too I killed her :( As for the Dark Lord, I'm going to keep everything mysterious on WA since his identity is part of the plot of the novel :p
I really enjoyed the journal style of this article and all the sticky notes and emojis. Elènie sounds like a fascinating character, though not necessarily a nice one. I like that about her, though. :) Great job!
Thanks Emy :D Yes, I love Elènie, and now I'm almost regretting she is not the MC! Cut-throat characters are just so nice to write XD
I really have to say that for me the best thing about the article is Isabelle, or rather her way of telling it. Especially at the end, this "and then I did it right and I'm still alive. Ha!" That was so good that I had to show it to my husband and he also thought it was great. Apart from that, I find it vividly described how the divination magic works there - and how much show is involved. It's a good system that is a bit different from the usual. So it makes perfect sense that they are sent to school so early. What I also find very successful about the article is that you have concluded the story (also through the add-ons) through the writing style and the examples in such a way that first of all no further questions remain open (and the story also reveals that Isabelle was right ^^). Especially when there is a lot of story to tell, this rarely works. - And the idea with the post-it is really very original. Thanks for the article.
Thanks a lot :D Isabelle is very fun to write too :p I really wasn't planning to do anything with music for the prophecy magic, but this challenge really ended up inspiring me, and I also love the result :D
I realy enjoyed this artical and how you used prophecy I look foward to reading more. I also liked how you showed the consequences.
Thanks :D I don't like people being able to truly see the future, so I had to come up with an explanation of how it could all work XD
Love the journal feel to it, with the sticky notes (how can I not love them?) and the sketches too! It was interesting reading about one character from another characters perspective (as an article) but it worked really well XD
Thanks :D Yes, everything is from Isabelle's perspective so I was limite by what information she had access to but I still managed to communicate what I wanted :D
Lovely article with interesting story. I love the explanation of how the prophecy magic works as I always love to find out how these sorts of things are thought to work as it is very intriguing. The explanation here feels very sound and logical, and I also love the fact that there is no actual seeing to the future involved but making predictions of the future on the base of the current state. The interesting question that raises is how the making of the prophecies affects one’s mind as I could imagine that the ritual might not be good to one’s mental health. The description of Elènie does not give lot of insight to that as I feel like the description could fit to child prodigy of any field. I also love the notion of how the common people feel about the war as it nicely underlines the fact that the poor people are the ones who often suffer when the powerful fight. It also makes me to question that perhaps the good and evil is not so obvious in here as the name Dark Lord implies. The narrator’s comments also give a nice tone to the article and somehow gives more information than just a business-like article of the same subject. The article also looks very beautiful. I like the pencil drawings added to the article as they feel like the narrator had drawn them themselves. Especially the small drawn self-portraits (?) showing emotions were precious. The small icons inside the text were however bit distracting as they interrupted my flow of reading and thus made the reading lot slower as I need to have focus when reading. I still greatly appreciate the effort you have gone through to place them there and the style you have wanted to achieve with them as they are clearly well thought out and placed with care. Overall, very beautiful article with thought-provoking story. Great job and sorry about the lengthy comment.
Thanks a lot for the comment :D And no problem about the length, feedback is always appreciated :D Thanks for pointing out some of the icons were a bit distracting. You're not the only one to have said so so I've deleted a few of them, especially when they were in the middle of paragraphs. It's still a new style I'm experimenting with so I'll know to be more careful next time :p Regarding how the magic affect the prophet's mind, I have all the magic in this world requiring specific mindset and focus that needs to be learn in childhood, including prophecy magic. In addition to using the plasticity of children's brain, they also use some potions with neurological properties. Those are slightly toxic and so they have strict limits in how much can be taken in what time period, and healing magic is also used to help. I haven't thought about those magics having long term effect on people's character and mind, but that's an interesting idea. I won't comment much in the dark lord and the politics since those are important plot point, but I'm glad the ambiguity come across XD Yes, the drawing are supposed to all have been made by Isabelle, and the small ones are indeed self portraits :D. Thanks again for the long comment :D
Great article, I really loved the diary format. I will definitely stick around longer to learn some more about this interesting world.
Thanks, glad you like it :D
This was really great. I do think you should weave the beginning on technique into your character's story ... perhaps her learning the technique to give a more personal feel.
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Thanks Dazz :D I thought about doing it the way you suggest, but to really make it work I would unfortunately need a looot more words and I'm already at the limit XD