Vivy Sturm

You don't need a textbook to understand how to feel things. Why should I care about what someone else has written? It's all fake. To look at the crowd, make them dance and scream, that is real life.
— Vivy Sturm, in an interview for ROCKing Starlets
  In a music world that sees new stars rise and fade in a matter of weeks, the lively Vivy Sturm has become an unlikely Wavepunk phenomenon. It is not that her music is bad, but it takes more than being good when competing against the industry's artist assembly line, a club for the genetically optimized with flawless musical talent and marketable looks. Carving her own way, Vivy's rise to fame relied on spectacular live performances and feeding the tabloids with more scandals in a month than others do in their entire career. "There is no such thing as bad publicity" is more applicable than ever in the 22nd century. Vivy's recent reveal as a Bionic following a near fatal helicopter crash has sent shockwaves through the world and even spawned its own conspiracy cult.  

A Star is Made

2167 was a harsh year for Nightline Unlimited Records. The label had attempted to milk the recent "Helltronica" trend for consecutive year number four. To the amazement of about every analyst, the audience was bored to tears with the artist lineup.  
If nothing else, we all owe Vivy for single-handedly killing off that stupid, though in hindsight very aptly named, fad.
ROCKing Starlets Editorial
  Nightline's star producer Rob de Vries was desparate to find something - anything - to break back into the market. He would later claim to have discovered Vivy playing for gangers and junkies in one of Gravity Squares' groungy dive bars. Industry insiders have repeatedly casted doubt on that version of events, however.  
That woman, Vivy's mother, had been harassing Rob for a year or so to get an audition for her daughter. He finally gave her a few pieces to try out in the booth, but it wasn't her style and she wasn't used to perform without seeing anyone. Rob wasn't impressed. Then Cheryl [the regional manager] suddenly suggested that she come out and try unplugged, told Vivy to go wild. And boy, did she. I'm not even sure what it was... singing, rapping, screaming, anything in between. My arms, I got goosebumps all over, it was intense. Powerful. When we were done, Cheryl, she gave me that look, and said to me

"Forget about that pop shit. This is a LOUD bitch."
— Audio Technician Kenny Scholz for the Rising Sturm documentary
  Vivy was offered a contract as the lead of a band, which would be assembled and supervised by Rob. It quickly became apparent that Vivy was the well of ideas they would draw from, though her scattered and restless nature made it difficult to get things done on time.     Their first single, "Clawing Back", was finalized two months behind schedule, at 4 AM while the band was riding circles and jamming on the Magrail. By Vivy's account, everyone was completely boozed out of their minds after four consecutive days of partying and having been ejected from their hotel room. The piece was breathless and harsh, disharmonic and chaotic, carried by the range of Vivy's raw voice that snuck on you in one moment, then kicked you in the gut while you weren't looking. To Rob's ears, it was a garbled mess that took all of his skill to salvage in mixing and postproduction. Contrary to his glum expectations, the single would become a modest success, and one direly needed considering the complete implosion of the Helltronica scene that year.  

Breaking the Limits

Frustrated by the band's lack of professionalism, Rob injected himself more directly in the creative process. He took up the job of picking the most workable of Vivy's ideas and providing the necessary direction to refine it into something that could be released. Among plenty of fights and drama, this arrangement produced a steady stream of new material. Vivy's writing and vocal style too began to take a more distinct shape, but that was nothing compared to her first live stage appearance.   The first set of songs had fallen rather flat, and the crowd was feeling tense. As the band prepared for the next title, Vivy turned to the audience.  
I know this isn't what you're used to. I'm sorry that I don't know you all well enough, but I want to. I want to get to know each one of you. Maybe you'll like this one...
— Vivy Sturm
  Though her words were simple and nothing unexpected had been said - something, though it defied rational explanation, had changed. As they resumed to play, with the beats of "Get Nuked" building up towards an ever faster rhythm, her raspy voice began to resonate with the beating of their hearts. Anger and frustration lifted, twirling and merging with the melody to fill the air with invisible jolts of energy. Vivy ended the song screaming at the top of the lungs - and the crowd was going mad.     From this point on, the band would deliver one smashing live performance after the other. Tickets and album sales exploded, arranging a world tour was given top priority. Bombastic stage shows using holograms, flame throwers, and clouds of Pixie Dust became as much as a part of the concert as the music itself - if not more so. This was the perfect outlet for Vivy's love of experimentation, who orchestrated ever more complex choreographies with little regard for cost or safety.  

Crashing Down

Overbooked concerts and record breaking sales did little to satisfy Vivy - if anything, the routine of tours and media appearances was bringing her closer to a nervous breakdown. She walked out of interviews on a whim, beat up reporters and insisted to be addressed as "My Queen". During a talk show, she suddenly claimed to have been born in the techno-anarchistic wilderness of The Frontier, sent here to "prepare subjugation of the city". A short while later she became involved with the postreligious Prisma Communion, used every opportunity to advertise for her newfound faith and refused to talk about anything else. All of this in addition to non-stop partying and rumors of rampant drug addiction ensured that the media could not get enough of her.   Nightline Unlimited Records was willing to entertain Vivy's eccentric antics as long as it was profitable. However, the situation was starting to hurt the corporation's bottom line. It is rumored that Rob de Vries received an ultimatum to deal with the situation. However it happened, Vivy's private helicopter crashed in an accident, killing the crew and hospitalizing the star for several months. When she returned to the public light, reporters were shocked by her drastically different appearance - a metallic layer of callous had scarred wide swaths of her skin. There, in front of their eyes, stood solid proof that the person Vivy Sturm was actually a Bionic AI. It was the scoop of the century, and it shook the music world to its core.  
She wants to thank her fans for their support and prayers, which have given her the strength to carry on and make a comeback tour later this year. Though this accident was a tragedy, there is also a bright side. She is convinced that it is time to show the world her true self, as a Bionic. We hope that seeing her climb to the top - noone was able to tell the difference between her and a true human - that this will help to combat the prejudice her kind faces every day.
— Rob de Vries, during a press conference announcing Vivy Sturm's recovery
 

The Real Thing

Although Vivy's comeback tour was the most successful to date, some fans are concerned that she has lost her fire. Only two new songs have been released since the accident; both of them are considered mediocre. Instead, she now appears much more frequently on the media networks' commercials or for cameos in popular TV shows. A documentary of her career was filmed, complete with "real" footage of her private life, painting her one time as a courageous rebel, then as a broken mess. She has repeatedly denied rumors that she is tired and avoiding the public. "I am more grateful and happy than I have ever been in my life", she commented during a "spontaneous" interview in front of her mansion.  
We all change as we grow older, don't we? But I still love music and my fans, and to them I want to say: Rob and I have an amazing plan to allow me to connect with you all in a way noone has ever done before.
— Vivy Sturm
  That announcement did not fail to raise a storm of rumors, but none of the predictions came even close to the truth. The very next day, commercials advertising the sale of Vivybots aired all over the Synflux. Such a step was unprecedented and caused an outrage from AI rights activists. However, their concerns were first ignored, then contested and undermined in a campaign spearheaded by a number of corporate scientists and ethicists.  
It is a machine made by humans, programmed by humans. It may look like us, but it simply is not equivalent. As our creation, it cannot have the same rights. Still, we should welcome the discussion, as long as it remains respectful and open minded. We have to be rational about this.
— Dr. Oskar Rasmussen, AI Scientist
Profession
Rock Star
Style
Wavepunk, Synthrock, Postclash
Debut
2168
Species
Bionic (originally thought to be Human)
Current Location
Church/Cult
Age
23 (human equivalent)
Birthplace
Children
Gender
female
Eyes
Cybereyes, silver
Hair
bright sky blue
Skin Tone/Pigmentation
light, blending with a pattern of metallic callus
Height
5'6'' (168 cm)
Weight
slim

Prejudice

Sentient AI known as Bionics are still a novelty in 2172. Despite inhabiting human-like bodies, they are not commonly recognized as free individuals. Many aren't even aware of their existence, or simply regard them as a tool just like any other robot. Before Vivy's identity was revealed, it seemed unthinkable that a Bionic could pursue a career as an individual, much less achieve a level of fame such as hers. It appears likely that this issue cannot be ignored for much longer.    

Mass Psychosis

Psychoanalysts have likened the trance-like states experienced during Vivy's live performances to a form of mass psychosis. On different occasions, audiences were overwhelmed by an intense wave of euphoria, light-headedness, anger or sadness combined with loss of memory and inhibition. Regular people seemed to have quite literally lost their minds, learning later in a police cell that they had been part of a rioting mob trashing the city after the concert. It was speculated that this may be caused by a combination of non-audible ultrasound and psychodelic drugs dispersed through the air at those events, though all investigations have been silently terminated following a number of sealed juidicial settlements with Nightline Unlimited Records.    

Famous Concerts

The Dome, New Hope Arcology
5/5/2170
La Fenice, Sea Wall
19/7/2170
New Bunkamura, Greater Tokyo
2/12/2171
 

Conspiracy

The unexpected outing of Vivy as a Bionic after the accident divided even the most loyal among her fans. Some came to revere her more deeply, as others turned away feeling disgusted and betrayed. Soon after the announcement of Vivy's comeback, stories circulated claiming that the returned Bionic was an imposter, while the real star had been replaced by this robotic shell. Her troubled relationship with Rob de Vries and Nightline Unlimited Records was treaded out in great detail, and every interview disseminated for hints of something nefarious under the surface. Had Vivy been planning to quit and join the chapter of the Prisma Communion? Was the accident an act of revenge by a hateful Rob de Vries jealous of her success? Or was the entire story just a deliberate ploy of the record label, a viral campaign spreading conspiracy theories to sell more tickets? Whether intentional or not, the incident turned out to be very profitable for Nightline Unlimited Records. Vivy Sturm's comeback tour was booked out within ten minutes of its announcement.      
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Vivybot Commercial
  Since their release, Vivybots are plagued by a tendency to malfunction and refuse orders. Software updates have been deployed to fix bad behavior, but in some cases they had to be replaced with new models entirely.


Cover image: Painting by PatoLenin
Character Portrait image: Portrait by PatoLenin

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Feb 9, 2022 04:07 by George Sanders

I am glad to be the first like. Intense story integrated with your description of Vivy. I enjoyed reading it.

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Feb 9, 2022 14:03

Thanks a lot!

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Feb 9, 2022 04:40

Very interesting article. I like how you've told the story of Vivy. It's super interesting to think about an AI behaving badly. I especially like how you've left a bit of mystery in the Conspiracy section. I am left a bit curious about Prisma Communion and what their main message is.

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Feb 9, 2022 13:58

Thank you! Good point on the Communion, it would be interesting to bring in an idea of what they are, if it doesn't slow down the pace too much.

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Feb 9, 2022 15:06 Private

I think a tooltip with a little blurb about them would be perfect and not interrupt your article It would look like this (just as example): Prism Communion   It is done with this bbcode: [tooltip:The Prism Communion seeks to overthrow humanity]Prism Communion[/tooltip]

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Feb 11, 2022 00:18

I've piggybacked on the fact that I created stub articles for anything and added tooltips for some additional info. Thanks for the suggestion, I am quite pleased how it turned out.

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Feb 9, 2022 06:49 by Stormbril

What an excellent quote to start things off with. You can absolutely tell that Vivy's got a strong character, right away! Followed up with a killer introductory paragraph, and I love this already. Also, Helltronica sounds like an AMAZING genre, lol. It's a shame it appears to be overdone and boring at this point xD   This article is as much of a rockstar wild ride as the bard the words are about -- it's a blast to read through it. I love how much is told here -- bringing in nights of nonstop partying, drugs, music production and concerts, all the way to insane fans and cult level status??   Really excellent work, she's a treat to read about and is an absolutely believable figure!   (one thing to note, I think the background on your .user-css-extended section might've gone missing, it's a bit hard to read these comments D:)

Feb 9, 2022 14:27

I am tempted to make a Helltronica artist just to flesh it out. It was challenging to pack so much into the article, but I am glad it wasn't as much a mess as she is. Her lifestyle reflects her art! Very happy that you liked it.

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Feb 10, 2022 10:06

And I forgot to add, thanks for noticing the bug in my CSS. I fixed it so reading comments should no longer feel like having an eye examn.

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Feb 13, 2022 06:56 by Stormbril

I'd love to read an article on Helltronica! xD You did a great job packing all the info in, too :)   And yay, the comments are definitely all better now!

Feb 9, 2022 07:26 by Catoblepon

What a good article! I enjoyed all parts of the story and it's quite interesting!

Feb 9, 2022 14:28

Thank you!

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Feb 10, 2022 14:50

Great read! Did not expect that reveal at the end! Also really digging your writing style. Was easy to read through and good looking layout with nothing being to long. I can imagine that over time with perfect artists doing something different can be hard, so her perfomrances sound pretty cool!

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Feb 11, 2022 00:22

Thanks for the kind words! Yeah I imagined her to be really about the performance more than the music itself - like a band that does a solid albeit not spectacular album but can make incredible live performances. Vivy takes this to the extreme... and well, she may have had some secret technological help.

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Feb 10, 2022 14:56 by Amélie I. S. Debruyne

Great article! Vivy has a very distinct personality that doesn't sound like something people in your world would expect from bionics! It's very fun and leads to a lot of speculation :p Did someone choose to program her to behave in that way? XD   I also love the idea of her emitting strange sonic waves that make people go crazy!

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Feb 11, 2022 00:31

I've found it interesting to keep a lot of mystery to a rock star that lives constantly in the public eye. It begs the question what is the real her and what is just the persona she puts up? Bionics are of course a large unknown right now, which fuels the insecurity that some fans have felt to her: "Oh my, suddenly the AI are trying to be a real person and put their own desires over servitude to humanity. This may end badly for us." I'll probably revisit Vivy later to clear up some of those open questions. Very glad that you liked her!

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Feb 11, 2022 05:37

So much of Vivy's personality comes through in this article.   It was a good and engaging read. Your layout and artwork choices really add to the article. The struggle of bionics echo's well with both historic prejudices and similar theme's in great sci-fi stories like Mass Effect or Neuromancer. Amazingly well done.

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Feb 15, 2022 23:43

Thanks a lot! Neuromancer is indeed a large inspiration for me, as I love primarily character-based cyberpunk. I hope I will be able to get a little more out of the 80's mindset (in part) and modernize the direction.

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Feb 14, 2022 04:04 by Robert

I love this idea, the concept of her showing a major change in personality after an accident is a nice touch, and the controversy of selling effective clones of her is a very clever choice.

Feb 15, 2022 23:44

Much appreciated! I realize now that the payoff comes rather late in the article, but I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Feb 14, 2022 10:16 by Clarissa Gosling

Great article!

Feb 15, 2022 23:45

Thank you!

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Feb 15, 2022 09:54

Nice one!
Somehow I get an Anti-FF9-Vivi vibe - guess it is due to the name and the fact that she is a selfconsiouned puppet or better "bionic" ^^
I enjoyed the ride from start to finish!
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Feb 16, 2022 00:07

Glad you liked it. I admit not being familiar with FF9, only 6 and 7. Though I like the term "puppet" as a derogatory for Bionics. Captures a lot of how they are seen and treated!

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Feb 15, 2022 22:55 by Dr Emily Vair-Turnbull

Helltronica is a great genre name and I will not be persuaded otherwise!   Vivy is a fascinating character, and I love all the conspiracy theories surrounding the accident and what occured. Lots of interesting mysteries to think about there. :)

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Feb 16, 2022 00:10

Thanks for your comments; I am glad you liked the mystery aspect, which is indeed meant as the major payoff for the article. In hindsight I think it takes a little too long to get there. I will have a Helltronica article some day, that's for sure!

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Feb 16, 2022 02:48 by Amy Winters-Voss

Oh I love the controversy with her as a Bionic! That is so cool!

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Feb 19, 2022 22:21

Thank you for your kind words!

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Feb 16, 2022 03:49

Lots of great details about Vivy and the world! I enjoyed the read.

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Feb 19, 2022 22:23

Thank you. Glad you liked it.

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Feb 16, 2022 11:47

Lovely, intriguing article that made my own conspiracy theories to run wild of what was behind the happenings of the story. The layout and pictures fit perfectly to the story and emphasize it well. I love how the story feels like hitting nicely all the modern-day celebrity trends with heavy partying, fighting with media, coming to faith, and then turning to bland commercial and reality tv star. The thing that was most intriguing was the fact that Vivy was a bionic or at least after the crash she was one as that casts very interesting shadow to the reckless behaviour and the temperament change after the helicopter crash.

Feb 18, 2022 23:44

I am glad that you liked these aspects, as they were indeed a central idea when creating her :). Thank you for your kind words!

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Feb 16, 2022 13:02 by Cecilie Mylius

Hello:)   I really like your article, it is very interesting, and I wish there was more to read about Vivy:) Especially, I find all of her recklessness, and quite unpredictable behavior fascinating - and all the saucy scandals. The conspiracy section is very interesting and just adds to every other aspect of your article. Has Vivy, and/or her producer Rob, ever commented on this conspiracy?

Feb 18, 2022 23:48

They started mocking anyone speaking up about it as a lunatic conspiracy theorist, naturally :) Glad you liked it, thanks for posting!

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Feb 16, 2022 23:30 by Secere Laetes

I must say, that was definitely something different. I generally like how different many bards are. I am really positively surprised.   Here I found it nice how much of her actual origin remains in the dark. Or how she was really "born". Just rumours and the official earlier story.   I also like how the entertainment industry is highlighted, which is indeed very capitalistic. After reading the article, I am most curious about these bionics. I'd be happy if you could write more about them than the short article, because there's probably a lot of emotions buried there and it could probably create a deeper understanding of the world (reminds me that my fanfic Star War Char always stood up for the rights of droids, kis etc ^^). Thanks anyway ^^.

Feb 17, 2022 00:08

Glad that you like it and I am very grateful for the feedback. I am glad you enjoyed the ambivalence between what is the "real" Vivy and what is just part of the show, which was one of the major ideas for my article. You are completely right that the Bionics are in dire need of getting their own article done - this will be my next project. Thanks again!

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Feb 17, 2022 14:56

Admittedly, I don't have a ton of experience with Cyberpunk/Sci-Fi stories. The prejudices against Bionics and how jarring Vivy's reveal would be in-universe would definitely be interesting to explore.   The Vivybots feel like a jab at corporate-copycatting and trend-chasing IRL as well as raises some interesting questions about AI pop stars.   Don't know how much philosophy/commentary you're looking to delve into, but I think there's plenty potential either way.

Feb 18, 2022 23:53

You are absolutely right - going deeper into the media meltdown following her reveal is something that would be very interesting, possibly for the coming Bionic article. While I imagined Vivybots originally as just the go-to option for a ruthless megacorporation which discovered it can sell literally copies of its megastar, you have a point that it could also be reflective of some modern trends. I will have to give it some more thought, thank you for all your input!

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Feb 17, 2022 19:46

Hi Mashed! Congrats on this article, that is a really nice piece of work. Being a visual person, I first noted that the backgrounds and images you chose were great to provide a general atmosphere to the article. In addition with the separation of the content into bite-size paragraph, that made the entry easier to read and digest.   While I suppose it is not fully related to the article itself, the idea of the Bionics, and the ethical questions their existence raise is great. It also makes the story of Vivy itself just as interesting.   I am not fully certain I understood: were the Vivybots produced by Vivy and her band, the studio, or were they an unrelated commercial product surfing on the hype wave?   All in all, congratulations for the well-developed atmosphere and the well held-together story!

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Feb 18, 2022 23:59

Thank you so much! I am still developing all the ideas of Bionics and I appreciate that Vivy, as the first manifestation and testbed of those ideas, resonanted with some readers. It's not very clear in the article, but I had intended Vivybots to be products of the studio - though come to think of it, having them just made as knock-offs would have been an incredibly interesting option. I didn't even think of that. I appreciate the inspiration!

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Feb 17, 2022 21:58 by Neil

I love this, especially the use of quotes from all kinds of sources. IT really helps ground the character in the world. The page looks amazing too, great design and art choices!

Feb 19, 2022 22:24

Thank you, I appreciate it!

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Feb 17, 2022 22:53 by Tim Day

That's one of the best opening paragraphs i've read for a bard - give such a great oversight and insight into the character and their career. I can't wait to read more... haven't hd a chance to yet cos rushing to work, but I will!

Feb 17, 2022 22:54 by Tim Day

Mass psychosis... i'm a fan. :-)

Feb 19, 2022 00:15

Thanks a lot for your feedback! I wanted a strong opening, and while I'm not perfectly happy with the quote in hindsight, I am glad the following paragraph seems to do a decent job.   Re: Mass Psychosis. What's better than a pumped up concert audience losing their minds and getting out of hand to sell a tonne of tickets, after all. It's good for business :D

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Feb 18, 2022 02:48

I genuinely love this article. Vivy is the sort of character you can't help reading on about just to see if it gets worse and how she'll wriggle out of trouble. There's not much I can say without repeating other comments from far more thoughtful and experienced people, but it's the little details like the Vivybot commercial and the dates of famous concerts that really sells the realism for me.   (づ。◕‿‿◕。)づ My entry for the bard challenge!

Feb 19, 2022 22:33

I am interested in as many perspectives as possible - thanks for adding yours! Truth be told, I had already questioned myself whether I should have added the concert details. Glad you appreciated that aspect of the article!

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Feb 18, 2022 07:29 by The Bard♫

Vivy is a great character! I really like this setting and could see it in a movie, or as DLC concert for Cyberpunk 2077.

Feb 19, 2022 22:35

My machine can't run Cyberpunk, so I will have to take your word on that one ;). Thank you, I appreciate it.

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Feb 18, 2022 08:16 by Racussa

Wow, the style of the whole article is amazing, but the content is even moretouching. The personal growth of Vivy through all the obstacles and misunderstanding is really hearthwarming. Although some song titles don't sound like they were my cup of tea ('Get nuked') I can imagine the persuasive character of connecting to the audience. Congratulations!

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Feb 19, 2022 22:39

This is high praise for me, thank you very much. Yeah the 22nd century is of course cranked up to 11, so song titles aren't exactly subtle anymore. The music is unapologetically aggressive, so that was the most destructive title I could think of :D

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Feb 18, 2022 10:32 by Tara Fae Belle

Wow. Well done. I like the added conspiracies and pixie dust.

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Feb 19, 2022 22:42

Thank you! The Pixie Dust was almost an afterthought, I had the name first before I figured out what it actually is :D

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Feb 18, 2022 21:08

I love the superstar bionic Reveal, this is great reading!


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Feb 19, 2022 22:42

Much appreciated, thank you!

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Feb 18, 2022 23:47 by Angantyr

I love this article!... XD The attention to small details from the story's beginning (and uncertainty) to the end plays out awesome. The images add a smashing colour to it, and I can't even complain about the sidebar — it's filled and aligned spot on. :D   How do bionics work? Are they born externally through other bionics, or do they need a robot line made by humans? Regardless, it's somewhat sad, though probably expected, that people would think of them as inferior because they were the first to discover the process and the architecture. It feels similar to all the "dibs" situations, regarding land, culture, etc. Maybe it's just part of human nature, at the same time, not admitting inferiority to the natural processes which shaped them and created those sentient forms.   I'm curious about the Vivybots. If they are instances of a Bionic, would they be equipped with a neural mesh capable of syncing to their "fans"? And so, if the robot is replaced with a new one, the gained information could be utilised by the seller (maybe even by Vivy) to create a better neural model of human behaviour?

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Feb 19, 2022 23:06

I became a little obsessive over making sure the sidebar and main text were of the same length. Empty space bothers me :D. For the technical details of Bionics I will unfortunately have to refer you to the Bionic article once I have it done - but I'll take your questions and make sure I address all of those aspects in the article.   Socially, one of the main conflicts of the setting is that society has relied on AI technology for over a hundred years now, and it needs sentient AI to sustain its growth. Giving Bionics human rights could shake the economy, so there is a lot of hesitation to go into that direction. However, with cases like Vivy the powers that be are getting into trouble justifying this stance.   The Vivybots are advertised to be like Vivy, but that's not really the case. They have the same looks, but the character is a rather poor imitation of her mixed with a generic girlfriend persona (because not even the fans could tolerate living with the real Vivy for long...). Still, the Vivybots are Bionics (so their personality can change over time) and they are able to upload their memories to some server controlled by the record label (Yes, the Vivybot is watching you. Always.). As you already guessed, the main reason for this is because the label wants to get data on how to improve the appeal of the Vivybots even further. Not quite incidentally, the whole concept is inspired by Vivy's connections to the Prisma Communion, though it is unclear whether they were directly involved in the creation of Vivybots.   Thank you so much for your insightful comments! This is a great help to me, and I appreciate all of it.

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Feb 22, 2022 01:10 by Janelle

Oooh! I absolutely love the intrigue and conspiracy behind the tragedy of her being outed as a Vionic. As others have said, this is indeed an intense read but so much fun with interesting and attention grabbing worldbuilding! ^_^


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Mar 16, 2022 21:53

Thanks a lot for your kind words! Yeah I agree that I could have done more to make the article flow a little easier - I probably channeled a little too much Neuromancer there :D . Glad you liked it, appreciate the feedback!

If you have some time, I would much appreciate your feedback on my entry for Adventure April: Carbon Copy Paradise