Renewed Passion

The hammer swung down hard on the glowing metal. Sparks flew as the metal was pushed into the divot in the swage, bringing more curvature to its shape. The hammer, comically small compared to the hand gripping it, rose once more. It’s rounded head fell swiftly again, the metal giving in to the impact, bending to the curve in the swage.

Rahg, the smith, set the hammer down on the anvil next to him, and picked up the iron tongs resting against the anvil. Pinching the candescent metal with the tongs, he moved it deftly to the large tank of water next to the forge, and submerged it, steaming. Waiting some seconds, he lifted the metal out of the water to eye level. His vivid blue eyes carefully examined the shape of the metal.

“Alas, a spoon,” Rahg said.

Satisfied with the shape, Rahg set it aside to be polished and chiseled to perfection later. He still had more spoons to craft, and wanted to get it done as quickly as possible.

Before he could begin anew, voices rising outside of his forge caught his attention.

The townspeople were gathered around a young man, who was frantically gesturing for them all to calm down. Rahg stood in the entrance to his forge, listening intently. His frame nearly filled the entire opening, which was already widened for airflow.

The young man managed to corral the attention of the crowd once more.

“Listen! Listen! I speak the truth! It’s all up in the Greypeak Mountains! Loads of mythril, waiting to be found!” he said.

The crowd murmured some more. One man raised his voice in agitation, but Rahg couldn’t make out the words.

“I’m telling you so you can beat other people there and get rich!” the young man responded.

The crowd murmured some more, and some people walked away. Rahg watched for a little longer, but found nothing interesting and went back to his forge.

Myhril, he thought. The legendary metal…

“Oi! Rahg!” a voice rang from behind.

“Hmm?” Rahg grunted as he prepared work for the next spoon.

“What do you reckon? Of this mythril business?” the man asked.

Rahg looked up. The man was Teren, a travelling merchant who frequently bought from Rahg.

“Mmm. It’s a legendary metal. Never seen it. Probably not real,” Rahg replied.

“So you think he lied?”

“Yes.”

“What if I told you I heard similar rumors up in the city?” Teren continued.

Rahg picked up his tongs, and held a small chunk of iron over his forge. “I’d call whoever told you that a liar too.”

“Even if I heard it yet again in Neverwinter? Even if I told you many have already left for this place and came back, confirming the rumors?”

Rahg waited for the metal to glow before pulling it out, and holding it over the anvil. “Mmm,” he grunted, picking up a big hammer. He started flattening the metal.

“Proof?” Rahg said, pausing his hammering briefly.

“Harder to convince than that metal you’re hitting, aren’t you?” Teren said, reaching into a pocket. From it, he pulled out a small, glittering chunk of stone. “Here’s your proof!” Teren tossed the stone to Rahg, who dropped his hammer to catch it.

Rahg held it up to his eyes. The stone glittered in the dim firelight of his forge like no ore he’d seen before. It wasn’t much in this little chunk, not even enough to make a nail, but he held it over the fire with tongs nonetheless.

The metal quickly heated, and glowed. It’s glow was somehow more… pure to the eyes of Rahg. It was a uniform, beautiful golden glow. Rahg moved it to the anvil and rushed to retrieve his smallest hammer from the wall he hung his tools on.

Rushing back, he gave the glowing metal one quick test strike. Finding the metal unrelenting, he hammered it once more, but harder. It gave only a little, but he hadn’t used his full strength yet. With one final strike, he hit it as hard as he possibly could.

The metal completely flattened under the small hammer. The force of his swing and lack of resistance caused him to break the handle of the hammer in two.

“Mmm,” Rahg grunted.

Teren watched him, eager for a reaction, but got none. “Even honest and true mythril can’t bring you to smile, can it?”

“You are certain?” Rahg asked.

“Aye.”

“Mmm. What strange metal,” Rahg noted.

“Aye.”

“Legends. How can legends be real?’ Rahg pondered. Teren didn’t respond. “Durable, but easier to shape than even iron. I would never have believed, had I not seen it myself. Why did you bring me this?”

“Rahg, your talents are wasted here. I’ve seen what you can do. You’ve made marvelous weapons and armors, but you come back to your hometown and make…” Teren trailed off, looking around. He spotted Rahg’s current project. “Spoons?”

Rahg shrugged.

“Imagine what you could do with mythril!”

“What do you want?” Rahg asked. He tried not to let on that he agreed with Teren.

“For you to find your passion again. I know under that rock-like attitude is a fiery man. I’ve seen him, when he really gets into a project.”

Rahg became slightly uncomfortable, knowing it was true. “Mmm,” he grunted. “I have spoons to make.”

“Think about it!” Teren said, as he turned to leave.

Rahg retrieved a new hammer, and returned to the anvil. The mythril, now flattened, was beginning to cool, so he reheated it, and brought it back to the anvil with tongs. He had to reshape it into a chunk, sometimes needing to reheat it again. Once it was in a malleable chunk, he raised the hammer.

Mythril…

He hammered the metal into a small disc, and then used a punch to make a sizeable hole in it. He had to act quick, before the metal cooled too much. Quickly, he moved the ring to the smallest divot in the swage, and rounded out the edges. Satisfied with the shape, he cooled it in the water tank, and pulled it out to inspect.

The ring was already smooth and polished as he pulled it out of the water. Rahg gasped, astonished at how easy the metal is to work with. Gazing at the ring, he felt invigorated for the first time in years. He silently vowed that this ring would be the ring he’d propose to someone with. Maybe after working with it a little more, at least.

Rahg looked at the spoon he left unfinished. After a moment, he made the decision to seek the mythril, and his passion steeled.


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Sep 25, 2020 14:16

I really like the simplicity of Rahg's origins to Mythrite, and to be honest, I'm the kind of person who loooves reading about smithing and forging despite not knowing too many details about it. Rahg's attitude really shows how little for conversation and expression he is, and how much he chooses to focus on his craft.   Personally, I like the detail in the smithing, but passive voice doesn't really suit it. It'd be a lot more natural to condense some of the sentences down a little bit and get the smithing action across quicker. For example: "Sparks flew as the metal was pushed into the divot in the swage, bringing more curvature to its shape." => "The metal forced into the divot with flying sparks, bringing curvature to its shape."   I also think you could introduce Rahg's name earlier, and his profession as a smith less abruptly: "The hammer swung down hard on the glowing metal... Rahg, the smith, set the hammer down on the anvil next to him..." => "Rahn swung the hammer onto the glowing metal... The smith set the hammer down on the anvil next to him..."   As far as using different senses, there were great opportunities for sound that you could've included! I'm an absolute sucker for the clang of metal against metal, and the hissing of water, vaporizing into steam once you stick a hot ingot in. There's a lot of satisfaction to sound in smithing, especially if Rahg's using such heavy strikes!

Sep 27, 2020 01:14

Honestly, right off the bat, the strongest component of the story that first comes to mind is the level of detail and description you put into the visual imagery of the piece. “The hammer swung down hard on the glowing metal. Sparks flew as the metal was pushed into the divot in the swage, bringing more curvature to its shape. The hammer, comically small compared to the hand gripping it, rose once more. It’s rounded head fell swiftly again, the metal giving in to the impact, bending to the curve in the swage.” Within the first paragraph alone, you perfectly set up an image of Rahg’s range of motion and illustrated the way in which the metal reacted to it. I noticed that the only senses you were appealing to were only sound and sight, which is nice, but it might be good/ a little interesting to also incorporate smells into the descriptions, since metals, forges, and so on have these unique smells coming together like the smell of the metals that Rahg would be working with, the smell of the fuel being used, or the oils and solvents being used, and even the sweat that comes of from Rahg or anyone else in the hot forge. And calling back to the first paragraph, just as a final note, it might have an even bigger impact if you start it with “Rahg’s hammer swung down..”, and the only reason I say that is it immediately places Rahg as the main character of the story.

Sep 29, 2020 00:05

I like what you decided to write about, the blacksmithing and the level of detail describing it alone paints a vivid picture of a man who loves what he does and applies all his effort to his trade. It's a more simplistic story, but the level of detail in the smithing and description of Mythril itself was intriguing enough to draw me in. I also applaud the structure of this, starting out with him molding a normal item and then escalating to having the chance to work with a small amount of Mythril accentuated the mystical aspect of this metal, and the potential that people see in its use.   If I could make a suggestion I'd say that the end of the vignette was a bit abrupt, specifically the last line. You did build up to it by having him work with the Mythril, but the last line just feels tacked on as if to draw the conclusion quickly that he was going to go to Myrhrite and make his fortune. In addition, I noticed that your descriptiveness is limited to sight and sound, which if you expanded to include all of the five senses I think it would really add more depth to your writing.