Keln Empire
You will make a fine addition to our EmpireThe Keln Empire is a hostile alien force. They have recently conquered Earth, subjugating it and forcing the entire planet to bend to its will.
Structure
The Keln Empire operates a military dictatorship. Everything goes through the Supreme Commander, who delegates his duties to assistants and oversees the activities of the entire Empire. The Supreme Commander has total authority and can do whatever he wishes without repercussions - his word is law.
Military
The Keln Empire have a powerful military force. Their organisation, efficiency and speed is unparalleled on Earth.
All their soldiers are all outfitted in high-tech exoskeleton suit that enables the soldiers to survive on any planet in the universe, as well as providing enhanced strength, endurance and information about its environment. They also possess an army of vehicles, planes and submarines to provide an advantage no matter the environment.
Order brings Power
Type
Geopolitical, Empire
Demonym
Keln
Government System
Dictatorship
Subsidiary Organizations
Controlled Territories
Notable Members
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Nice little article with some nice writing and prose! I wouldn't want these guys finding earth, that's for sure... Here are some notes I gathered after reading it a couple of times:
Correct me if I am wrong, but isn't Keln the only alien civilization that humanity has encountered at this point in Consternation? Do you think it would be more helpful for the reader to be given a comparison from a more human perspective rather than universal, since the other aliens are never really mention? Something like "The Keln are a hostile and brutal alien empire, intent on conquest yadda yadda"? Why not just call it a dictatorship, then? :) Sounds pretty much like it is a military dictatorship. I guess this falls in line with my first point of feedback, with much the same thought. It might be useful for the TaleFoundry readers to know? I'm not sure! That's a great quote that sets the tone for what these guys are all about. Consider using a different world then "own" to emphasis the nature of the Keln Empire. 'rule' or 'dominate', for instance. The flag/nation symbol is really great! I really like that one! :D What do they do with the natives in more broad terms? Pretty severe oppression, I imagine, but have they ever run into a situation where they're done with a planet? If so, what do they do with the natives? What happens after 100 years of occupation? Also, I would consider using a custom header instead of "Public Agenda". Something with a bit more of a dramatic, universe-conquering flair :) How do the Keln empire's technology compare to contemporary humanity? Other then the exo-suit and some seriously impressive genetic-tech, I am having trouble picturing exactly what they have. I'm also having trouble picturing what the Keln themselves look like; but perhaps that doesn't really come to play in the story anymore. Maybe it's more about transhumans vs humans? Thinking about it, the name Transhuman is a little bit unfortunate when they're the big scary infiltrating enemy. It might just be me, but worth having a ponder about?Creator of Araea, Megacorpolis, and many others.
Wow! Thanks for the detailed feedback Qurillion, I'll make some edits based on the improvements you suggested. To answer some of your questions, they primarily force the natives to work as slaves for the Empire - though some are experimented on to improve their genetic technology. They have not completely drained any of their planets of resources yet, but I imagine when they do they would continue to put the natives to work or, if the people have outlived their usefulness, destroy the planet. The Keln Empire's technology is ahead of ours but not wildly so. They have, as you said, impressive genetic technology and the capability to create wormhole devices, but they aren't living in a futuristic techno-utopia. As for the Keln themselves, they are humanoid creatures but I haven't put much thought into their exact appearance currently - as you said, the story is about transhumans vs humans.
Haha, let me know if I'm going overboard. I look forward to seeing what you do with it! :)
Creator of Araea, Megacorpolis, and many others.