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Civil war continues to rage 695 years (278 Earth Years) after the assassination of the last empress and the fracture of Ironfoot into warring states. Nations rise spectacularly, almost achieving dominance before falling as quickly as they rose. The 7th of Palia, 295 After Empire, is just another event in this cycle. The Kingdom of Colren, with its two million citizens, now turns its eyes eastwards towards the declining Republic of Mitrand, their major rival. The storm clouds rise before the midsummer sun, with a fleet of ships below. While an uneasy alliance has kept peace between them for a few decades, Mitrand has committed an act of war, and now is Colren's time to respond.

Theresa Mari Benicius, the commander of the Colreic fleet, looks over her fleet with pride. But she knows she cannot invade by the force of a fleet alone. Islands would need to be taken, and that would mean a long, bloody campaign. The seafaring Order of Aeramen will need more strength than the twenty thousand amassed at the cliffside village of Liton Tais, Lanasu (Island). She needs to find a way to devastate the Mitrand's army.

During Theresa's planning, a diplomat mysteriously disappears. Theresa, being the temporary military governor, seizes the diplomat's journals and begins an investigation. She finds evidence that the Society of Magisters are actually a front for a group of powerful magisters who can use Luck-Intent magic. According to this journal, he had been investigating this organization for a while before his disappearance. As Theresa starts ~~kidnapping~~recruiting magisters for her invasion, the Society must race against time to reclaim them. They know something Theresa doesn't: if magisters get involved in this war, life may never again flourish on the Ironfoot Isles.

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Lanasu (Island)

Geographic Location | Oct 9, 2018

A cliff-bound island in the eastern borderlands of the Kingdom of Colren

Liton Tais

Settlement | Oct 9, 2018

A cliffside harbor town in eastern Lanasu

Luck-Intent Magic System

Generic article | Oct 12, 2018

General notes regarding Mythos 1.3

Luck-Intent System by ElementalShrike

(Summary of Luck-Intent magic system)

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CronosAssassin

Oct 12, 2018 03:34

Well, it certainly caught my attention. I don't know many of the events or factions listed here, but the pitch works to keep the reader (at least me) interested. It sounds like this is setting up a lot of events that are going to take place in the near future. Was this the intent? An elevator pitch normally has a purpose, like selling a product or pitching a product to an investor. What exactly are you trying to pitch? On an aesthetic note, I personally don't think the Dropdown letters work very well, the formatting looks a little clunky, but it might just be the font. I also am not a fan of dropdowns in general, so it may just be my bias :P Also, the Luck-Intent system looks freaking awesome, but that isn't this article, so I won't go on a tangent. The last paragraph is a bit confusing to me. It sounds like a diplomat goes missing, is this diplomat one of these magisters? Are the magisters her allies? Also, when she finds out about their secrets, why do the magisters start disappearing? It kind of reads like there are two different sets of magisters? Gripping though, it caught my attention, lept my attention, and made me curious for more!

ElementalShrike

Oct 12, 2018 16:05

I've edited the prompt. Does it look better?

Quetzalcoatl

Oct 12, 2018 06:13

Hello again. I hate to be a bother but I was unclear on a few things. I hope asking here will help alleviate that confusion.

The Kingdom of Colren, having taken a sixth of the twelve million people in Ironfoot...

Did Colren capture, kill or convert these two million people? Either way would be a win for them and a pain for Ironfoot having lost the resource of people for labor and warfare and with it any advantage that brought them closer to being able to deal with Colren from a position of power.

Civil war continues to rage 695 years (278 Earth Years) after the assassination of the empress...Mitrand has committed an act of war, and now is Colren's time to respond.

From the sounds of this, the Civil War that sprung from the Empress' demise hasn't stopped. So the act taken by Mitrand seems like an "Act of Aggression" or "Act of Hostility" in a war that has firmly been established and shows no signs of stopping. How can any act taken now be seen as "declaration" of intent unless the act was especially heinous? Is the civil war not affecting trade or commerce with former allies? As you think about these questions I hope it helps you flesh things out here more.

ElementalShrike

Oct 12, 2018 16:05

Forgot to include that they had a non-aggression pact. I've edited the prompt. Is it better?

Quetzalcoatl

Oct 13, 2018 04:19

It makes a lot more sense this way. Good work.

Venerable Grandmaster Qurilion

Oct 12, 2018 11:55

Wow, I can really see the results of all the editing and work you've been putting in! Nicely done :) Some note:

Nations, one by one, rise spectacularly, almost achieving dominance before falling as quickly as they rose.

Three commas in the opening sentence there makes it stutter a bit there. Consider rewriting that so you can avoid them, maybe. :)

But she knows she cannot win an invasion by the force of a fleet alone. Islands would need to be taken, and that would entail land warfare, in which Mitrand has a substantial manpower and discipline advantage.

If you are still looking to cut words to use elsewhere, consider cutting "win an invasion" and leave "win by the force of a fleet alone", since the next sentence goes into detail about that. You could also go for something more dramatic than "entail land warfare" like "that would mean a long, bloody campaign". :)

Class tensions had been running high for some time, and many of the more powerful point to a farmer's cartel, saying that they must have taken him.

"class tensions" comes a bit out of nowhere. How is it class tensions rather than the tension that comes with having 20k armed soldiers camping out around your town. :)

Creator of Araea, Megacorpolis, and man y o the rs.

ElementalShrike

Oct 12, 2018 16:05

I've edited the prompt substantially. Does it look better?

Venerable Grandmaster Qurilion

Oct 12, 2018 17:30

Yep! :+1:

Creator of Araea, Megacorpolis, and man y o the rs.

Venerable Grandmaster Sai-Tyme

Nov 15, 2018 18:04 by Sai & Tyme

My curiosity has been captured by your conflict's prompts and I naturally navigated to other articles to better understand these other pieces about your world. :) However, I think I may be reading your border dispute map incorrectly. At first glance it looks like one big land mass divided by borders, so I couldn't see the actual islands. But I assume it is supposed to be encompassing the Ironfoot Isles land masses and water territories together and they are just not visible on that map? Would that be correct?

ElementalShrike

Nov 15, 2018 23:46

Yes, that would be correct :)

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